We all know first impressions count, from the title to the very first sentence. So if you lose the reader at this point, chances are they won’t be coming back again. Whoever said ‘don’t judge a book by its cover’ probably was not in the writing industry. The first line needs to be brilliant, presenting something curious, shocking or entertaining, and it must be an example of your best writing.
Fear not, writing buddies; you’re not alone in editing that all important line for the trillionth time. It’s something most of us struggle with at some point.
Here are some examples of excellent first lines, they hook your attention long enough for you to think, ‘oh, what’s happening here?’ Lets’ take a look, perhaps you’ll recognise a few.
“It took seven years to get the letter right.”
“Blue Sargent had forgotten how many times she’d been told that she would kill her true love.”
“The screw through Cinder’s ankle had rusted, the engraved cross marks worn to a mangled circle.”
“I remember lying in the snow, a small red spot of warm going cold, surrounded by wolves.”
“I hate having to dress like a man.”
“After a year of slavery in the Salt Mines of Endovier, Celaena Sardothien was accustomed to being escorted everywhere in shackles and at sword-point.”
So what are the magic ingredients for crafting a great line?
They encourage a sense of curiosity or shock: Why does she have to dress like a man? Why does she have a rusted screw in her ankle? What was so important that it took seven years to write?
They present the reader with conflict: Will she escape slavery? Why does she have to kill her first love and will she get away with it? Will the wolves kill her?
By combining curiosity and conflict you drop the reader straight into the action, where things are about to start happening, getting to the heart of the story as soon as possible.
While it’s tempting to lure the reader in with beautiful descriptions and lengthy prose, you run the risk of losing the reader’s interest before they’ve had a chance to meet your character.
The same might be said for opening with dialogue; the reader hasn’t had a chance to become orientated with the story, let alone become invested in your character. Why should they care what they’re talking about?
Alternatively, opening with inner dialogue gives a deeper perspective, potentially allowing the reader to become accustomed to your MC through their thoughts and actions.
Don’t forget to check out your favourite novel and see if any of their first lines grab your attention.
Thanks for stopping by.
Until next time, Much Love.
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© Author Lorraine Ambers and http://www.lorraineambers.com, 2019.
THIS 1000%! 😀 Action and conflict are all great ways of hooking the reader’s interest right off the bat. Changing my story opening from ‘Man gets off boat, walks through unfamiliar city, reacts to things’ to ‘Man getting beaten up, won’t stay down,’ was such a useful angle to try out – it makes the reader curious to read on, presents an underdog character (hopefully!) who’s down but not out, and dialogue openings are always great in immersing the reader in a living, breathing world.
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Excellent post.
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Thank you, Andrew. 😁
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You’re welcome.
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Good advice! Those first pages are always the hardest – and sometimes all you have is the first line before someone decides to try the book or not.
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Exactly, so the pressure is on for all writers.
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Another great technique from Lorraine Ambers!
I terribly fail at this. My last short story began with dialogue (and now I see why it was weak).
Could I translate this one into my blog too?
Thanks again!
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Starting with dialogue is a great way to hook the reader in a new chapter.
Yes, feel free to translate any blog post. Thank you, Lucas for your support.
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I love The Raven Cycle and I love the first line of The Raven Boys! I think you’re definitely right about curiosity and conflict being the key factors. I find a lot of first lines fall flat because they try to paint a picture, and that’s just not the kind of opening that personally draws me in. Great post! 🙂
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Thank you, I loved Blue, I need to buy the rest of the series to see what happens next.
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Blue is one of my all time favorite heroines! The rest of the series just gets so much better which I didn’t even think was possible after reading The Raven Boys but it definitely is lol. 🙂
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Where can I get a copy of “How To Hook A Reader….From The First Sentence”?. I’m terrible at that.
Great post LA
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And now some sage advice about writing that very first sentence. The one that’ll hook your reader and have them saying…”Oh, this sounds good. Tell me more….”
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Thank you, Tom. I appreciate your support. 😀
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Just re-blogged it on my sight too. This was too good not to do that.
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Sending hugs and gratitude. 🙏
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I’m writing an article on introductions actually. Do you mind if I link to this one?
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Go for it! Thank you. 😁
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Great read, and though I have only written a couple pages of my book, I will certainly be falling asleep with this post in mind about how I can sink the hook myself. Thank you!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it. Those openings line can be tricky, but I’m sure you’ll have fun trying to get them just right. ☺️
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Excellent post Lorraine! I am OBSESSED with opening lines, because great ones can be so effective at hooking readers into the story. One of my semi-recent favourites is from The Steel Remains by Richard Morgan: “When a man you know to be of sound mind tells you his recently deceased mother has just tried to climb in his bedroom window and eat him, you only have two basic options…” 😂
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That opening line is fantastic, now I want to read that book. 😆😊
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It’s a very intense trilogy! Dark fantasy (with sci-fi themes) at its absolute best, in my opinion 🙂
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Some great advice, Lorraine, but I’d have to disagree a little with you about stories that open with dialogue, but only because I write a lot of stories that have nothing but ‘dialogue’ in them. It’s something I enjoy doing. I think dialogue can also be a great opening and get a reader hooked, usually, when a character asks a question such as “Where has all this blood come from?”
Something else that can also get me hooked (even before reading the first line) is the title of a chapter. I love giving chapters titles rather than just numbering them, but I guess there are pros and cons for both?
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You make excellent points. Opening with dialogue in short stories is a great way to start, therefore if the dialogue adds curiosity or conflict then you’re off to a winning start.
I’m now going in the hunt to find a novel that starts with dialogue.
Great tip about naming chapters. Thanks for commenting.
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Excellent tips, Rainy 😊.
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Thanks Kate. 💙
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As a reader I am hooked if the story line can be told in the opening sentence. This is my favorite from Stephen King’s The Gunslinger:
The man in Black fled across the Desert, and the Gunslinger followed.
Oddly enough the book was not my favorite but the opening sentence was good enough for me to buy it.
It needs to be short and drive curiosity. The ones you mentioned are perfect. They cause the reader to pause and wonder what happens next. This is hard for a writer to pull off but a necessity if we want our work to sell.
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Well said, and you’re right that opening is amazing. Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks for sharing. 😁
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Thank you for sharing 😄
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Combining curiosity and conflict…great advice, Lorraine!
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Thank you Lily, I’m glad you found it helpful. 😊
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Thanks for sharing
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So that’s why first sentences are so hard to write!
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Absolutely, I think they’re at the same difficulty as writing the pitch and synopsis. 😅
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How to Hook your READER …
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Thanks for sharing 🙏
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Welcome Lorraine. It was an interesting read.
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Thanks for sharing
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